ࡱ>  Root Entry( Jr =1MatOST =1 =1MMMN0 ND ( JrMicrosoft Works MSWorksWPDoc9q 3\N]@ 3L`2]@`2%^@L WORDINESS aka. THE RAMBLER What is wordiness???? It is the use of too many useless words that clutter up writing. Good writing is simple and direct; it uses the simplest works pCompObjU at the same time as while Example: The guests were eating at the same time as the band was playing. INCORRECT The guests ate while the band played. CORRECT 4. Delete the following phrases and variations. there is ... that it is ... that Example: It is the wedding dress that is the most important item of the day. INCORRECT The dress is the most important item of the day. CORRECT Now you try!!!! Rewrite the sentences to get rid of all the excess gunk. 1. The marriage will succeed due to the fact that it is raining on their wedding day. 2. The bride did her hair in many different ways before she got it right. 3. Brides generally tend to do most of the planning.   &.74HQTVWqr{{uom{m{ime{i{i`ei`(  0$&@I_f{{wsososjsjsosjsosjso(   '@IZ_} 4={v{r{r{v{r{v{r{v{v{r{r( {w{w{$&?24TVqqkkkkeSSAAAh ! VqLoq{1_mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmK?BDmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmDFHJLNPmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmyVD Arial @ Comic Sans MS LithographPosterBodoni BTST  " 7=/8d tI T WORDINESS aka. THE RAMBLER What is wordiness???? It is the use of too many useless words that clutter up writing. Good writing is simple and direct; it uses the simplest works possible to convey the same meaning. Although wordiness clutters up a piece of writing, it is a sign of growth. 4 Steps to catching wordiness. 1. Eliminate redundancy. Redundant Rehabilitated many different ways many ways the reason ... is because because Example: The reason the wedding failed is because the groom was missing. INCORRECT The wedding failed because the groom was missing. CORRECT 2. Delete empty words and phrases. essentially I feel in some ways virtually I believe for all intents and purposes generally tend to really Example: Essentially I feel the reception was fun. INCORRECT In some ways the reception was fun. CORRECT 3. Avoid expression that can be more clearly said in another way. at this point in time at this time had an effect upon influenced with the possible exception of except at the same time as while Example: The guests were eating at the same time as the band was playing. INCORRECT The guests ate while the band played. CORRECT 4. Delete the following phrases and variations. there is ... that it is ... that Example: It is the wedding dress that is the most important item of the day. INCORRECT The dress is the most important item of the day. CORRECT Now you try!!!! Rewrite the sentences to get rid of all the excess gunk. 1. The marriage will succeed due to the fact that it is raining on their wedding day. 2. The bride did her hair in many different ways before she got it right. 3. Brides generally tend to do most of the planning.   &.74HQTVWqr{{uom{m{ime{i{i`ei`(  0$&@I_f{{wsososjsjsosjsosjso(   '@IZ_} 4={v{r{r{v{r{v{r{v{v{r{r( {w{w{$&?24TVqqkkkkeSSAAAh ! VqLoq{1_mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmK?BDmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmDFHJLNPmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmyVD Arial @ Comic Sans MS LithographPosterBodoni BT =/8=/8d